A Slightly Less Rough Rough Draft

I made some revisions to the draft (by some a mean I added some more detail to the voice over) but I didn’t change the dialogue or added settings, stage directions, etc. because we still don’t exactly know where we are going to shoot. However, Nick did find a good program to use to make a movie script look like a more traditional movie script instead of the “thrown together at the last minute” style of scripts called Studiobinder that can add shots, locations, and even storyboards. Anywho, here is the second draft of the script.

Cut to a man (Detective played by Fares) filling a car with gas at a gas station. Chiaroscuro is used)

Inner Monologue from Detective: “Precision simulation hired me to investigate who hacked into their simulation and bring them to justice. Ever since the first attack, it has been glitching – time will move erratically, you will be in a place you don’t remember going to. On the bright side, after this job, I’ll quit: I may be young but I’ve put in too many hours to keep working this dead-end job. My partner for this job is a felon and a hacker and once we’re done with this job, Precision promised to wipe his slate clean. He seems like the kind of guy that is too ‘goody two shoes’ to even commit tax fraud, but I was shocked when I heard that he …” (Cut off by Hacker speaking)

Hacker (played by Kevin) walks into frame

H: “Can I put some color back in this world; all this black and white is making me depressed?”

D: “Sure, whatever.”

H: “And then I said, let there be color!”

Chiaroscuro gone in next cut; color present

H: “There, much better. Now, did you find any information on our culprit?”

D: “Well, we know that they’re good at altering this simulation, so they must be good with computers.”

H: “Way to go, Sherlock, I mean do we have a witness or, better yet, a name?”

D: “We do have a name: Bostrom. That’s all we have though: no face, no age, and no location.”

Cut to another establishing shot; D and H are in the same position, but at different gas station

D (as he is getting in the car): “They may be on to us, let’s get out of here.”

Title card appears with sound of the car door shutting.